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Advice and opinions on the first paragraph of my novel?
here it goes:
The weather was once again bitter. The sunny and warm morning sky had become in what seemed seconds a gloomy, cold evening. Adaya sat under a tall pine tree, gazing onto what would be completely full of beauty if it wasn't for those lousy, dangerous evil spirits hidden in it - The Dark Forest. People believed it had gotten its name by how the spirits never let the tiniest speck of light within the reach of the secret. Every now and then Adaya and her sisters would glide aobut the marketplace a few miles away from the forest and heard a big quantity of the population spreading rumors of what the secret was. But it was her who really knew. She had always seen dreams of it, dreams of her running joyfully into the forest, defeating all the spirits tempted to do her harm. Nobody knew that she knew what it was, though, and she didn't think bragging about it seemed to make their un-wealthy family more pleasant. She lay there for a few long hours on end.
Additional Details1 week ago
btw- is it interesting enough? lol, and would you read it? i reccomend it probably for kids, preteens and teens....
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1 week agobtw- is it interesting enough? lol, and would you read it? i reccomend it probably for kids, preteens and teens....