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Can you please tell me how I can improve this poem??

Please, No kiss *** answers. I want your true opinion and input . I have already posted it and fixed it once, but tell me if its better or how I can improve it. Thanks! (I'm also looking for a title.)


the cold autumn frost shields the morning sun,
glistening fragments of ice
cover the ground.
darkness.

My head swirls and buzzes.
??Seven wounded and twenty-four dead??
squawks the radio.
I bow my head in shame.
war.

I grab my sisters tiny hand and pull her to the lake.
the thin sheet of ice concealed the waters beauty beneath it,
but she reached for it anyways

She began to play in the frost
forming lines
then letters.
the letters formed a word,
and the word was beautiful.

PEACE


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I don't know how you can improve it,but I like it as it is ,I don't kiss ***.