Another poem I've written. How's it?

Question:

Another poem I've written. How's it?

Choking,Choking for love.
Longing,longing for your touch.
Why.........
Why did the pain cease?

Weeping,weeping since eternity.
Shedding tears in self pity.
Why........
Why did the tears Dry?

Lying,Lying to myself.
Dying,Dying; no help.
When........
When will it end?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Your poem is OK. But did you try to imagine how good it would hear or read, if the repetations could be avoided ?

Choking for your love.
Longing for your touch.
Oh, why did the pain cease ?