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Position:Home>Arts & Humanities> Okay.Here's one more poem from me. What do you think?Question: Okay.Here's one more poem from me. What do you think?Living for Nobody. Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Honestly? I think you're trying to hard. I'm not a poet (fiction writer) but there are aspects here that do work. But certain word choices seem forced. There are moments when some of the lines fall naturally and others seem as if you contrived for an effect. You do get mood across, and the overall "idea" comes across stronger from the middle to the end. But hey, I'm no expert. |