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Totally origional poem-please comment.?

Three

3 seconds after you had gone I knew I'd made a mistake
3 minutes after that I knew I couldn't stop the shake
3 hours after that I lay on my bed awake
3 days after that I knocked on heaven's gate.

St.Peet came upon me and for time he asked a bit
So I came with him into a room were I was asked to sit
I was sitting there when he asked his one and final hit
Why I had acted so strongly and had my horrible fit.

I told him what had happened between me and you
I explained to him the times we fought even before then,too
And in the end I told him that what I said was true
So he sent me back down here to eath to do what I had to do.

So toward your house I walked on air
Wuth you my expiriance I did share
We made up because you do care
between 3 people my expiriance was there.


This was a poem straight from the heart. Please post a comment. Thanks! volleyballcha2012


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I luv this poem...I like the 3 sec/min/hour theme...very original like you mentioned...The title is catchy...very self explanatory-which I like...beautiful poem...

p.s.
at the end just fix that typo: "experience"

Good Job!