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How do you like this poem?

The girl I like has gone to a summer camp and will return in a few months. I want to be different for next time I see her. (more confidence, more secure, etc)
ok.. here it is.....

Changing myself is different than before,
I wish I knew what I'm living for,
Is it you behind me?
In the mirror, is that you I see?
Are you there, or just an illusion?
20 feet behind me, silently shouting all my reasons.
I've found out that you're my motivation,
Saying nothing only making motions,
As you stand there closer to my ear,
Silence all around me, yet it's you I hear,
You're saying more than I thought possible,
Yet it's not even audible.
You're right behind me now,
Whispering in my ear somehow,
Telling me to stay,
I'm changing in every way,
Everything and anything I can do,
My every reason is right there, hiding in you.


I can do a lot better but I want to know what you think.

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1 week ago
Nobody's saying anything. I'm just looking at her and seeing everything she's saying just from her body language.

1 week ago
Ohh sorry I see what you mean. It's her "saying" everything even though no one's talking


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: 1 week ago
Nobody's saying anything. I'm just looking at her and seeing everything she's saying just from her body language.