This poem's mine... what do u think?

Question:

This poem's mine... what do u think?

....when ma enemies became closer
and i was about being the loser
fire broke out inside ma soul
a fire that's more furious than all what i fear
and i had to kill them all
as they then became so near
so i had the power
in ma dark desert like a flower
so i stood up
not to run but to stop
in ma long way....

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: i've read this poem several times and well, keep writing but i think you could do with listening to what the others have said it does sound rap and ma? tha int na poin la. and used correctly ... at the start and at the finsh... it lets us imagine we're only in the middle of a story the poem is telling us the middle. which is a nice creative touch and one i've not seen done in that way. but unless you're french... closer and loser do not rhyme...