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What do u guyz think of my latest poem?

It's really deep it's called death

DEATH
Death is knocking on my door
Why won't this door open?
The longer it takes the more
I feel weak, I cry myself to sleep
Each night as i patiently wait to be sweep off my feet

I know i have received love over the years
But find it hard to share and open my heart.My ears
pain me to hear the words 'I LOVE YOU'

Love really hurts and at the end of the day it makes you wonder
If the individual really loves you or is deceiving like an anaconda
The more I reflect on these things the more i feel wanted
But I think my time here on this earth as expired
and is no longer required.



Deep,is it do u feel it?I
s it a nice poem?
What are ur views on my poem?


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: why all the negativity, people?
anaconda = snake. "Deceiving like a snake," get it?? wasn't that hard. also, obviously our precious Kath isn't in some sort of trouble.... she's experimenting. sure, she's been in love and maybe she knows god and maybe she doesn't, but this is a poem not her reaching out for guidance throughout the rest of her life.

hi, Kath! so, death is knocking but won't come in.... in the beginning, you are waiting for the door to be opened by death, but by the end you seem convinced that you must help death enter by opening the door yourself. merely through the pain of love, desiring one's death is noble and poetic, but thinking that strangers won't immediately think "get professional help" in response to your lines is too naive. pain and death, without more to go on, are, for anyone who's read quantities of poetry, cliche and overused. for an excellent poem on death, see Austin Dobson's "Fancy from Fontanelle."

page down a little to get to Dobson's poem.

Keep writing!!