-yawns- Okay, what do you think...?

Question:

-yawns- Okay, what do you think...?

I wrote this. I don't rhyme. And these are my thoughts. I am clearly stating I know I'm classified as Goth. Uhm...I know the poem may be a little sad. Don't even tell me. I know it. Thanks in advance.

Can she fall
Faster than before
And still land on her feet?

Can she stand up tall,
Strong and happy,
Without shedding a single tear?

Is there such thing,
She wonders,
As being a beautiful disaster?

This girl is smiling,
But at the same time
She's crying.

Complete as she may seem,
Inside she's shattered.

Will there ever be
A way to mend a
Broken heart?

Does the cure
To a shattered life
Even exist?

She has so many questions
And so little time
For the pieces of her heart
Are tearing her apart inside.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Hi, thanks for writing I don't know if you want to revise this at all, I don't want to be presumptous, but just in case you don't mind here are my ideas:

A couple changes you might consider (S=Strophe L=Line):

S3 L3: Consider dropping the word "being"

S6: This kind of sounds like a country song. You may want to rewrite. I'm not being sarcastic.

Beyond that it read well to me. Those were just my thoughts do with them what you will.