Should I fix anything with this poem? Im 16, go easy on me?

Question:

Should I fix anything with this poem? Im 16, go easy on me?

When I'm Alone
Thoughts collide and stumble into complications,
weaving tangled and unsolvable webs
My worlds meet; physical, mental, emotional, spiritual
...and release as one

Faded secrets and memories of my unique past fall forward
into the brightness of this contained, enclosed space
Tears strive to reach the floor with welt up emotions
only to be swept away with the swift stroke of a hand

The steps of my soul present themselves front and center,
clear and spontaneous
and ignite with the quintessence of passion
Beats and changing rhythms ricochet off every corner encountered
but each beat is absorbed by every inch of me

Dreams pierce my imagination and the creativity in sleep
rattles my brain
only to be vague in consciousness
I'm released from the days judgmental stares,
stares and faint whispers from the unknowing,
unaware of thoughts and words behind closed doors,
closed eyes

It's freedom magnified ten times over
to be stronger
to be smarter
to be who I hope one day I can be outside those doors,
one day when they open forever
when people just become the stuffed animals on my floor,
the books on my shelves, the reflection in my mirror
When I'm free from the of my own judgmentaleyes,
eyes that still judge my very own reflection

Only I have the key to unlock these chains and escape forever

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: This is amazing. While I read it, I was listening to Black Sabbath's "Heaven and Hell" and this poem painted a lot of pictures in my head. I'm one who likes poetry because it is art in the form of words and your poem is a perfect example of that.

Don't fix anything - it's just fine the way it is. Changing it would only take away from what you've already accomplished.

Keep doing what your doing - people with a creative mind like yours don't need to stop.
I love it. Continue writing, it's obviously a natural talent of yours.