The critic has one more for you. Will you critique it?

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The critic has one more for you. Will you critique it?

I came up with this one, two nights ago. I was really feeling like crap but no worries, I wouldnt try any of it...

Red Sea of Tears

I look upon the mirror
And cannot find the slightest reflection
Anguish and anger rise within me
A mirror is no longer to be seen
Between my fingers
I hold a broken glass
It soon creates a red sea of tears
As it falls in love with my blue vains
A tinggling feeling is born
It's not pain
Pain is what you made me feel
This is nothing to compare
You didnt need a glass, a knife, or even words
My end was followed by your silence
I came to your door
There existed no approach to open it
I shouted your name but
My calls were left unanswered
My heart is shaddered
My soul left with no meaning
Here you enter to discover
The affair between my vains and the glass
How dare you ask why?
But my pain will soon subside
As I am left to drown
In my crimson sea of tears

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2 days ago
Thanks Captain Jack, I see what you mean. I'll definately keep your comments in mind for my next one.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: 2 days ago
Thanks Captain Jack, I see what you mean. I'll definately keep your comments in mind for my next one.