A lyric tell me what you think?

Question:

A lyric tell me what you think?

A Servant??s Song

Darkness sheds around me,
No where for me to be seen.
Like a cave filled with darkness,
Calling do I desperately.

Lord, help me, this is my song.
Lord, hear me, light this darkened path.
Lord, help me, to cleanse myself.
Lord, help me, to see your glory.

A light, yes, I do have,
Still, there is dark that sheds round me.
Guilt, builds up and now I want to see
Your glory shining all round thee.

Lord, help me, to glorify thee.
Lord, help me, to be a witness for thee.
Lord, hear me, so I can testify thee,
Lord, help me and show me my destiny.

Lord, help me, I want to glorify thee.
Lord, help me, too see your glory.
Lord, hear me, your servant praying to thee.
Lord, hear me, I want this song
This song to be my destiny to glorify thee.

I'm 15 and want to serve the Lord with all my heart and want to help others with their walk for the Lord. I hope you will understand my song and my prayer.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: First of all, Good For You!
Secondly, when writing these, since God is 'thee' you would capitalise it. The same goes for references in Him, He, His, My, You, Your, or the liek for your furture references.

Well I Love this. Especially the title; since it is true we're His servants. Well, I think you've a lovely heart and good for you for wishing to to glorify Him in poetry and song. One of the best things we can do is use our talents given to us to put forth His word.

You've a lovely heart, my friend. Way to go!!

Keep writing, absolutely!!!