Do you like this poem?

Question:

Do you like this poem?

ok my friend made a poem and im on the fence i like it but something is missing from it. but i mmight be crazy so here is the poem and plz tell me your honest opinion i want to be truthful to her.
Its hard to act like nothing is wrong when your heart is crying out for the love and affection it needs
Its hard to act like nothing is wrong when not only you but the ppl around you are fake
Its hard to smile and not cry.
i like it but i dont really like the last line so plz tell me wat u think thnx
and if u think i wrote this u r wrong i cant right a damn line of poetry lol

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4 months ago
PPLP I DIDNT WRITE THIS GOSH IM NOT A POEM PERSON OR W?E YOU CALL THEM!!!

4 months ago
PPL I DIDNT WRITE THIS GOSH IM NOT A POEM PERSON OR W/E YOU CALL THEM!!!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Personally? Not a big fan. While I appreciate the effort to express one's feelings, the rhythm is all wrong on this one. Just from a technical standpoint. A poem is like a song, and your favorite songs would sound very strange if you smashed all the lyrics but one line into a couple notes. Too many syllables!