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Do Like This Poem?

tears full as the river flows, my haert cry's out but i'm all alone, is the end near i hope so, hope for the earth what is that? but will i ever go back to the world that was kind and thoghtfull? i don't know but a new day will dawn in my eyes as i cry for a life we all had befor the world dies.

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Ariel. (me)


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I liked it that you write what you're feeling. But you're not writing ALL that you're feeling. DON'T PUT LIMITS ON YOURSELF. Let your soul f l o w. . .
but to be honest, and a hard critic, what I loved most about all you wrote was your name. Sorry but you have to keep on practicing, NEVER GIVE UP. Don't let other people put you down from critics, USE them to fine your way of writing. You can learn from your mistakes.
Why don't you start with ryming poems?.
Just some advice..
writing dosen't come from when you're born, it piles up with time, and wisedom fills up your spirit, and lets it out.. with godly words..