What do you think of this unedited poem in rough form?

Question:

What do you think of this unedited poem in rough form?

Tired of the borderlines
Across the streaks of bloodshed
For a flood of tears on a land
So hard to define
So hard to define
Breaking bread and wine
So hard to say goodbye
In search of the better life

Come on, one strike and you're down?
Two strikes and the sirens sound
Three strikes and we all hit the ground
Talking to them when nobody's around
Laying your guns on the ground
Laying your guns on the ground
You won't say it when somebody's around

Set them free set them free set them free

Tired of waiting for nothing
With children's hands out
Hopeless and hungry
All this talk of money
In the face of tragedy
a living disgrace, people get angry
Homelessness, houses destroyed
No inquiry but a guard at the door
Subjected to the same misery
In the making in the making
Governments and armies
Governments and armies
Governments and armies
People divided down the middle
More by thought than borders
That exist eternally
In the face of divisiveness
Governments and armies
Governments and armies
Hungry for nothing

This is Kosovo
This is Chechnya

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I can not understand why no one has bothered to answer you.
Having seen and been in War Zones I knew almost immediately what your poem was about.
A war.
I think that it is quite good.
1. It would make a great song.
2. It is well written.
3. You can understand immediately what the poem is about.
4. it gives you an overwhelming visual and emotional response.
5. Even in North America people could relate,the Gang Wars.

I think that it was very good for all of these reasons and more.
Keep up the good work.
Cheers!