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I wrote this! (feedback please)?

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He yells, She screams
He punches, She cries

Yet again they??re in the same place
Yet again dabbed makeup to cover the scars up on her face.

Loving him was something that was so hard for her to do
She gave up her whole world just to be with him

He brought her down to a place so low
As she continued to take his assaults blow, after blow
Emotionally and physically she was completely drained

Not knowing the amazing women she could be
If only she would set herself free

She puts a smile upon her face
Wishing time could erase


All the pain he caused her
Timid and bemused

His insincere apologies she tried to refuse
But, they always ended up in the same place
With him taking out his anger with his fists against her face

After so many years, and tears
She finally got the strength to leave him
And she promised she would never go back

She finally realized someone who truly loved her, would never treat her like that
-Lovely lala


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It a nice poem but frankly, a well covered topic. Maybe even over covered. Keep writing though. You've got some serious potential. Also, you could try reading poetry some more. Ive been reading alot lately and I think its been helping the way I think when I write.