Ok, what about this poem?

Question:

Ok, what about this poem?

"Bullshit lies soon become you. Foolish of you to let him into your heart so easily. What now Mrs.Blackhearted? What now, oh, fond Silence? What now, but to walk in the shame of knowing that loneliness was your only fate. There is no soul mate for you. No love for you. No assuring words to lead you out of this suffocating heartache. No. Here you will stay. Here in this state of forsakenness, you will stay. Here in this life of forgotten ness, you will stay. But no worries, My Dear Blackhearted, your friends are here to help you. My Lovely, sweet Blackhearted, we'll always be here for you. My Beautiful, soft, Blackhearted, so delicate you are, Misery will always be here for you."

Not as good as it could be, but its something. (I'm depressed and I didnt just break up with my boyfriend. So if thats on your mind then dont even waste my time with an answer. ;-) )

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

i like it a lot. you have a lot of talent :) you used great word choice and you could really feel the emotion in the writing.

i was a little confused the first read-through but after a second time it made a lot of sense to me.

i think it would be easier for the readers to comprehend if you divided the lines (i cant tihnk of how to phrase that, sorry haha) because maybe its just me but i have problems reading in paragraph form.

i think your poem is really amazing though. you used so much emotion and its like.. compelling. i loved it. :)

<3 Ellie

if you wanted, you could read the poem that i posted in my question.. i really need some constructive criticism for it.