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Do you like my poem?

I wake up and realise,
that the pain will pass by,
but if you pass me by,
i'll just wake up and cry,
i waste my life just standing there,
with everyone mocking me without a care.
I will stand up for myself someday,
but now all i can do is stop and pray!

3 months ago
Please tell me what you like about it, and waht you dont like about it!

3 months ago
Dick that is fine! I am honored! I hope everything goes well! and im sorry for your loss

3 months ago
Read my other poems if you can find them!

yea its good but need better ending. if ur going to make everything rhyme then make the last one rhyme and stand out to get ur point accross and have power. im a poet myself and think of what i want people to get from mine and transmit them to paper. u have a good composure but need to fix a little thing here and there.. but good job though.