Question:
What do you think of this poem?
my 1st composition..
when i look into your eyes, what you see?/a mutual forever-friends guarantee?/my eyes are lying cause what my heart's pleadin/is for you to look harder and stop this misreading/this pain is ripping me apart from the inside out/a black plague consuming my beating heart/i used to feel, i used to love, i used to smile/i wanted to think you were the only thing worthwhile/it's this disease, this never-ending affliction/you're my drug, i can't stop this addiction/meaningless embraces from a heart already taken/you think i'll be there for you, you're ******* mistaken/when this plague spreads and turns your heart black/i'm turning the other way and never looking back/cause i'm done and over with wearing this disguise/you can't see my heart, the one that underlies/all the excuses i used to explain teary eyes/the eyes that you looked in when you said your goodbyes/all those times you left my side for her/you told me in your eyes who you really prefer
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I liked it....its so realistic.!!! I write poems too...but not as good as yours...can't wait to read the rest!!! Is this based on your life?? If so...soo touchin!!!! Keep up the good work!!!!