Hi! i've posted a poem of mine 2 weeks ago and i'm posting again... comments ple

Question:

Hi! i've posted a poem of mine 2 weeks ago and i'm posting again... comments please???

Prominences

White hot bruise screaming,
The feeling inside me??s crushing.
Thought the twinge will give way to my dying,
But my heart wants to die still trying.

Passing out, last view??s darkness.
Sting??s evaporating continuous with sickness.
And then everything??s gone, nothing but blackness.
I just embraced the comfort of my ugliness.

I??ve always thought that heaven??s happy.
That when they see me, they??d welcome me like family.
But then I saw a deeper side of it, unfortunately.
They??re all glowering as if a devil sent me.

Wandering aimlessly against tide of swears,
I saw someone smile at me at the back of stairs.
He set three pieces of bright red flares,
I followed it and led me upstairs.

Here, now, at last, I found heaven.
Just he and me, no one stops us - God even.
He took my hands - this is what I??ve been missing.
My whole life, the feeling is foreign, its called Loving.

---- oh,and someone asked me my age the last time,im 17 years old...young huh?

Additional Details

3 months ago
uhmmm.what do you guys mean when u say my poem is "dark"?? is that a good or a bad thing???

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

A poem from one with a life time ahead
With themes of dying, darkness and God.
Our hope is your life is lighter, instead.
And music surrounds from your iPod.

Too much deep thinking can create
Melancholy and navel gazing.
When what is needed is time with a mate,
Having a drink and just being amazing.

Keep writing, release all your thoughts,
Share your hopes, tell your dreams.
Like a sailor passing through so many ports.
Finding the time to dunk custard creams.