Question:
Could you help me edit/improve my poems?
what do you all think of my poem. Serious answers only please. I need advice on this stanza for my poem for editing/improving it.
The rhythm of running feet,
Echos its melodic beat,
in my soul I hear their song,
begging me to run along.
then this is another one of my poems,
I hear the children's laughter,
their joyous little cries,
like bluebirds in the summer,
singing through the skies.
Jesus loved the children,
"Suffer them to come to me"
gently He took each one,
and blessed them lovingly.
When Jesus said "love everyone"
I'm sure He meant the children too,
for every single step we take,
they're watching all we do.
Additional Details3 months ago
Somehow Kerry I had a feeling you'd be answering this question! lol
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I wouldn't change a thing. They are perfect.