Do you like this poem? I wrote it myself!?

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Do you like this poem? I wrote it myself!?

Picking Grapes From Vines of Venice

I walk into the cool vines of grapes
The brush against me like drapes
Cool wind in my face
A nice, cool loving place
Picking from the mighty vines
I see the grapes connected to the vine??s lines
The grapes are green and purple, too
I see them and what should I do?
I eat the delicious things
I run back through the vines and fly like I have wings

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3 months ago
Please no rude comments! I do not really want my feelings hurt today! Just nice comments or constructive critisism!

3 months ago
Oh yes I am not an adult yet I am a teen so...

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Hey Emily,
It sounds great, so far. But it leaves me hanging, like there's
more to it that you haven't written. It has the beginnings of a
really good piece of poetic work---it just feels like it's not yet
finished. Do you have more in your mind (in your soul) that's
waiting to come out into the open?? It really is GOOD, and it
sounds like a "dreamy" topic for you, and it sounds like it's
about two-thirds completed. Keep working on it, Emily. And
don't be afraid to show your emotions and feelings. I would
like to read more of your poetry, if you'd like.