Question:
How could i revise this poem?
(note this my own work i wrote, i just need help reviseing)
I was fed by my mother
Im fed by the work of my mother
I will feed her by the work of myself
I was taught by discipline
I am taught by wanting
I will teach by example
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I was fed by my mother.
By the work of my mother I was fed.
By my work, I will feed her.
By discipline, I was taught.
By wanting I am taught
By example, I will teach.
The cycle is ongoing
The cycle is without end.
Man draws life from his mother.
And he gives life to another.