Hey here's another one of my poems...can you pls. comment???!?!?!?!?!?!?

Question:

Hey here's another one of my poems...can you pls. comment???!?!?!?!?!?!?

"Night and Dawn"

Across the darkness, he sails through his sleep
Not knowing what his dreams has for him to keep
Through the chaos of darkness he patiently urges on
As he waits for the glorious light of dawn
-paul diaz

Pls. comment!!!!!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Way too many cliches.