Question:
What do you guys think..?
i am a poet...i want o know what people think of my new poem...enjoy!
Thanks!
~shannon~
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Live Without
Learning to say goodbye,
Remembering those beautiful eyes
Tearing myself apart for my every mistake,
The lose of you is something I can??t seem to take
The heart will freeze,
The pain will never ease,
Life may go on
But you??re still gone
Without you the pain churns
The heart yearns
The tears dry,
And yet I still ask why
How do I survive?
When you??re the only thing keeping me alive
When you??re the only one who holds the key
The only person who can set me free
As everyday goes by,
You??re still the only one on my mind
Still the only person I think about
The only guy I can??t seem to live without
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Its very nice.There is obviously a lot of feeling behind it.But just check the fourth line-shouldn't it be 'loss' instead of 'lose'?
Sorry if I'm wrong:-))
Hope I helped.