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Do you think this is a good poem?

this is for school just wanted to know what you think its about pi



Pi
There was a man who counted a number
This number is called pi
He really made a blunder
Because he??ll be counting until his day to die


just tell me what you think or if i should write a new one


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Try this:

There once was a man
who counted a number

this number is called pi,

he desperately made
a terrible blunder

he'll be counting
till the day he dies.

There has to be an easy, not forced ebb and flow or rhythm to the poem. Your idea is fine but the style should flow and remember in poetry, less is more.
You've got the right idea so good luck.