Take a look at my poem and tell me your thoughts please?

Question:

Take a look at my poem and tell me your thoughts please?

A touch of your skin on mine
A brush of our lips as they touch
A look into your eyes
A smile completes the rush

A touch on my waist
The close of a moments kiss
To open my eyes and see the only thing that matters
It's how I describe my heavenly bliss

Arms wrapped around me
My head lies on your chest
Hearing the breath escape our lips
This is how it must feel to be perfectly at rest

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3 months ago
I'm 15. lol

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

hey, not bad! i was dreading it at first, but after reading, it's alright. work on cadence.