Please tell me what you think of my newest poem?

Question:

Please tell me what you think of my newest poem?

Here lies a beautiful soul
By: Adam Snow

The daylight falls into the blackest night. I saw your face once as you faded into the cold murky night. The Shadows gathered to take you away. Your sorrow filled eyes have scorched my naked soul with grief. Your life has faded away, mine is here to stay. The Shadows have taken you home, but I am caught in this dark forsaken world. The mourners grieve for your lost and so do I. Your tombstone reads, "Here lies a beautiful soul."

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Separate your verses. I think you have a beautiful soul. I give it a 7