Question:
OK, I did this poem for a project...?
It's finally completed! One last problem, though....
My teacher said to get construction paper or whatever and decorate all around the poem. Too bad, though, I can't think of what to draw/do around it. Can somebody help?? Thanks!♥
Additional Details3 months ago
it's supposed to be like a bio-poem thingy. i still can't think of anything! OMG!♥
3 months ago
Here's the Poem:
Nora
Quiet, Entergetic, Outgoing, Fun
Relative Sister Of Hakim
Lover Of Cats, Shopping, Friends, And Chocolate
Who Feels Loved, Cared For, And Royal
Who Needs To Be Pampered, Talked To, And Loved
Who Fears Bugs, The Dark, And Being Wrong
Who Gives Love, Peace, And Happiness
Who Wants To Give The Community Better Transportation, More Parks, And A Clean Enviornment
Who Will Change The World By Stopping Starvation And Disease
Resident Of Milton, Florida
Norris
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Hello,
I read your poem, and before you decorate the page on which it appears, I truly suggest you reconsider how you have constructed your words. Honestly, I would not classify your writing as a poem; it's more of a character or personality inventory. A poem is supposed to say something about its subject beyond and deeper than the words on the page. Also, it is not necessary to use upper case letters on every word in order to create a poem. Upper case letters should be used very sparingly, and only in certain cases in poems or prose. They are for emphasis, and to make a particular word (especially one that has allusions or connections to other works of literature, to history, or which are symbolic) stand out from those surrounding it. When everything is capitalized, nothing stands out.
Please don't think I'm being negative about your effort. I think you're on a good track but I believe you could easily re-work this into a true poem, just by using these qualities and such you mention and putting them in some sort of meaningful order, not just a list. While I'm certainly no master poet, I have written and published for many years. Here's just a possibility for editing your work, but PLEASE make it your own.
Milady of Milton
Nora, Princess of Florida,
Feeds chocolate to stray cats,
But's not very fond of bugs, dark or rats.
She has lot of ideas for saving the world,
But tell her she's wrong and her lip will soon curl.
Her brother Hakim says she's fun "of a sort,
Though her patience at times can be very short."
Friends love her and spoil her and she takes it all in
With a quiet peace and a mischievous grin.
We gladly bow down to Milton's own Queen,
But remind her she's really just a Florida teen
Who's loved for and cared for for this and for that.
Oh damn, I just tripped over Snickers, the cat!
Again, I have just taken your words (except for "rats" because I needed a rhyme) and turned them from a laundry list into sort of a story. I hope you like it, and take my suggestions in the spirit of fun and helpfulness I intended them.
Your friend,
David
P.S. How to decorate the page? Well, in my opinion, the poem itself (in whatever form it finally takes) should be enough decoration. But, if your teacher wants you to do this, I guess you should. Maybe get stickers of crowns, tiaras, pictures of bugs, chocolate wrappers, and anything that reminds you of Nora and glue, paste, or attach them to the paper. Maybe use some Christmas garland or ribbon around the border in royal purple or gold. Your love for Nora will help you know what to use.