Question:
Like my poem..?
All the sudden.
All the things I ever lacked
all the sudden come rushing back.
All the things I've ever said
Go rambling round my head.
All the things I've ever feared
All the sudden feel very near.
All the the poems in my soul
Fell down a deep dark hole.
Every time I see you near
Your every thing I ever feared
ever lacked
ever said
you choke the thoughts inside my head.
By the way, im only 12 and i think i wrote this in fourth grade, so please no harsh comments.
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Your poem is pretty good. I would recommend that you don't post it on here though. I found a site that was made for this purpose:
storiesmania.net
You can post your poems there and have them rated by other writers/authors/poets.