Question:
What do you think of my poem?
Maybe rate it 1-10, 10 being the best.
Pierce my heart,
drive it deep,
put me in an endless sleep.
I cry out tears,
tears of pain,
why does love seem just a game?
Alone, I hold onto you tight,
dreaming of our coming night,
when life just dies.
Love is pain.
Drive the knife and end the game.
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Sounds like romantic love poem! Perhaps you could spice it with a few images like:
Pierce my love-sick heart,
with your erotic blade,
drive it deep. . . . and. . .,
entice my sweet eternal repose.
As it is, one would think the lines - endless sleep - suggest death.
what about . . . 8!!
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