Is this a good intro for a story?

Question:

Is this a good intro for a story?

The morning sky seemed to crack through the clouds, while hectic dreamers busied themselves with technology. Sign holders were echoing chants of hate, while street performers played and danced. Ticket sellers beseeched consumers, and the homeless cried. Foreigners shuffled their hands to communicate, and tour guides urged their team to come forward. There was a circus beneath the splitting sky, and all the performers began to play their skits.
It is difficult to describe how time can move both quickly and slowly at the same time, because it is such a rare experience. However in this bustling city, it was exactly how time moved. There was so much going on at once, that it seemed like an uncoordinated cacophony of movement and noise. The city provided a feeling of never ending rushes, yet at the same time each tiny part was a puzzle piece. Each performer moved in leisurely methodical movements, that if you were to look at just one, it would seem as though time would last forever.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It is SO much better than what we usually see here on Yahoo! Answers. I like that you start with description and then save the explanation until the second paragraph (though I definitely like the first paragraph better than the second). Just revise a bit. Maybe replace "seem to crack" with simply "cracked through" (it is stronger and more direct that way), instead of chants of "hate" say something more specific to replace hate. Last line of first paragraph: Try "In the circus beneath the split sky, all its performers acted out their skits." Or somesuch . . .

In Paragraph two,I'd cut "because it is such a rare experience." Show, don't tell, the saying goes.

Good luck with the revisions!