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I need some feedback on this poem i'm working on?

I need someone else's point of view of it and what you think it means....its not for class or anything just for me...

I??ve heard many lies.
This is the worst.
To build up an ego.
And just let it burst.
I went in the world,
believing your word,.
Took a step out the door,
and was shot down like a bird.
How can you stand it?
Telling such things.
To build up an ego,
and give mankind wings.

2 months ago
when it says "believing ur word" it's supposed to say "words"............if that makes any differance at all!

2 months ago
also if anyone has any ideas on a title for it...that'd be great :]

redo the shot down like a bird one