Question:
Feedback on poem please?
Drink Till It's Gone
by: Poetically Incorrect
Being paralyzed to the pain is better than dealing with it
Drink your sorrows away baby girl
As soon as the liquor hits you're tongue, you love the taste of it
You drink until you can't feel anymore
He forced himself on you, and now you can't live anymore
5 bottles later you don't know whether you're coming or going
All you know is that the tears keep flowing
being drunk is better than facing reality
The Truth of the matter is you're pregnant
Afraid of what to do, you keep drinking to kill it
Why do you fear it?
drunken teenage mother, caught up in the world all alone
the guy who raped you was twice your age, he was grown
baby girl keep strong
you were never in the wrong
dry your tears
and stop drinking away all your fears
* One of my shorter ones, but still meaningful..Feedback appreciated
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Baby girl keep strong.
In God's Hands you belong.
Drinking doesn't take away the pain.
Personal experience tells me the same.