At the end they'll see critics are needed to rate this poem honesty is needed so

Question:

At the end they'll see critics are needed to rate this poem honesty is needed so i will know if this poem is ?

I am so high
To the sky I??ll fly
Don??t need any drugs
Just you with me

You are my world
You are that guy
Just you and me
At the end we??ll see

Love I feel
Pain I don??t
Just you and me
They??ll leave us be

At the altar they??ll see
It??s me and you
So baby
Let??s make this be
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is this a cheesy poem
i am bored at work and decided to write
i hope you like
if not
you can bite

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I don't know if you did this one purpose, but in the last stanza it says "me and you" instead of "you and me". I think the "you and me" flows better because it fits with the rest of the poem. Also in the first stanza the third line should be rephrased so that it also flows with the rest of the poem. It seems a bit long compared to the rest of the poem so the rhythm is a little off. Just shortening it to one less syllable would probably work. Maybe you could try "I don't need drugs". Just a suggestion :) Your poem has a lot of potential. After just a little editing I'm sure it will be great. My favorite stanza is the third one. I don't know why, I just really like it. Good luck!