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Would anyone like to rate my poem?1-10?

humble are those who watch so cautious in the dark as if unconscious /with every last breath it would take to leave something arose on hallow's eve / untamed undead oh mercy me /
have you forgotten bout' the enchantress on hallow's eve she strikes her revenge upon only those who act innocent watching
closely while you sleep help oh lord she's got (sreams)-meeeeeeee! by:amber Brazil TELL ME HOW CAN I IMPROVE!


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

8/10
You could lose the "(screams)"
Another than that, well done.