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Is this poem good? (poem inside)?

I don't know if the spacing on here is working right, because in the preview it looks kind of mashed together. But here we go lets try


Part 1


I want him
To look at me and
Want me so deeply
Give me an embrace
So warm it starts a fire
And leads
To so much more
Desire
Overcomes me
I want him in
Ecstasy
I want to show him
What I am capable of
How exactly
I can make him feel
Skin bare and smooth
His fingers trace
My body
Pleasure
Overcomes
Him



Part 2

The look
He knows it well
Begging eyes and pouting lips
Who could say no?
Cotton, jean, silk
Glide to the floor
Feel hair in my grip
Kissing so deeply
Purely electric
Purely erotic
Ultimate trust
He feels my lust
Touching
The forbidden places
We love
Tousled hair
We are one
This is the point of no return

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Thanks for any help or advice!


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Very good. It produced very hot images in my head. I like it just the way it is.