What do you think of this Poem ?

Question:

What do you think of this Poem ?

I'm still not sure if this can become a poem or a note. Please let me know what you think of it. And what can you do to improve it.?

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Oh! I did not realize, how
Days passed by so quickly!

I still can??t believe it
Right at this moment
I??m packing my bags

I cannot imagine, how
I will bear, the unbearable,
Piercing pain, in my heart,
When I will have to,
Wave you goodbye

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It has a very emotional theme, leaving someone you love. You need, however to put more emotion in it. Also, why are you leaving, who are you leaving and why? One of my poems is about the rapid passing of time for humans in relation to other things-And as the sun of ages Passes through I realize our days are , oh, so few. Then I relate to the short span of other things; I love to see in mornigs glow; The lovely Tulips that I grow' They bathe themselves in mornings dew; Too bad their days are, oh, so few. But in their days they glow and shine; Their aesome beauty is just devine; Though I did plant them row by row; Its God alone that makes them grow.......KECK