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What do you people think of this poem? it's short though?

Why do we believe in love??
Why do we live with love??
Why do we live for love??
It??s because we try to believe in the one who created it,
It??s because we try to live with his love,
It??s because we try to live for his love,
It??s because we??re worth nothing without who created love,
It??s because we worth nothing without God and nothing worth it without us loving him??..

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8 months ago
Thnk u all, I really apprecaite everyone's point even if he dissagrees with me, actually it really helps.
Special thx to askandill..., Star2-n-.

8 months ago
Don't worry Ted T!! you're right I asked, Ireally appreciat your point.
Special thx to Rooster/B, Lanchelle, and Sele0419.
You see guys English isn't my mother tongue, so I really admire any comment of an English fluent speaker, AGAIN, even if you don't like it, but would u plz, if you don't like it, mintion your reasons?


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It is a nice poem !I would like it a lot better if the last word of the 1st line rhymed with the last word of the 2nd line and the last word of the 3rd line rhymed with the last word of the 4th line and so on. It gives the poem some life and rythem. don't get me wrong it is a nice poem. an example is
Why do we believe in love
Because we are taught by the Man above
You have a nice poem. Keep working at it and writing.