Question:
Do you like my poem?
I wrote this last year for a Poetry Slam at my school, and thought I'd get some reviews on it! What do you think?
Lights go out
it's time to start
I look at you,
a work of art.
Perfect smile
flawless skin,
translucent strings
to move your chin.
Do you dance,
sing your song.
The crowd is there,
to cheer you on.
Now move a little,
more towards me.
You say your lines,
so perfectly.
One more trick,
the crowd applauds.
Turn to them,
and give a nod.
Curtains fall
I take a swallow,
You're still cold,
and fake, and hollow.
You're nothing more
than a wooden doll.
No feelings, sense,
or love at all.
The best puppet I've ever seen.
I only wish I could cut your strings.
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Very deep! A situation everyone has experienced, and well worded. Bravo!