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My attempt at a 'quite' light poem. Please read and comment.?

a lovely night,
under full moon.
simple silence,
very dim light.

for once,
darkness is good.
simple silence,
in a good mood.

One person's heaven,
another's rest.
somple silence,
silence is best.

I know, I know, I'm not used to writing these type of poems...

7 months ago
yeah, it was simple. sorry, typo error.

7 months ago
ok, I was thinking of the part with 'very dim light', I read it again andagain, I know it didn't sound right, but I couldn't figure out what to write...

hi, replace the line "very dim light" (l.4) with a different expression, plus in line 11 you probably made a spelling mistake, were you gonna say "simple" instead of "somple", or "sample" - well i doubt that makes sense ;) in general your poem isn't too bad...