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The people that you hold the very closest and dearest to your heart are the ones who you count on never leaving you. You see them everyday of you life but you are unable to fathom that one day they might not be there. They might not see you grow up and mature, maybe they will never hear your voice again. I took every day for granted with my best friend when I lived in Michigan.
Even when I was still in the womb, I knew my best friend. My mom and his mom met while they were pregnant. From the moment I was born, I knew Justin. He was one of my favorite people in the whole world.
After pre-school, I would go over his house and we would play games in his massive front lawn and then go inside for an amazing treat from him mom. This became the routine of almost everyday. We were inseparable. If I asked to go somewhere, it was assumed that Justin was going with us.
Additional Details7 months ago
One normal day in first grade, my whole world fell apart. I went to Justin, of course, I went to see Justin and have our usual playtime. As soon as I arrived home, I knew something was wrong. The house was covered with cardboard boxes and encased in plastic wrap. While I had been at school, someone had attacked my room with boxes. Thoroughly confused, I asked my mother what was going on. All she could tell me was that someone had bought our house and we were moving to Georgia.
I didn??t quite grasp what was going on, I knew we were changing houses but what it did for my friends and I was all I could think. I asked my mother if Justin was coming with us and when she slowly shook her head, trying to avoid this delicate topic I realized what moving went. It didn??t just mean changing homes, it meant getting rid of everything and starting over. As I thought about this, the hot, salty tears dripped down my face. I knew I was never going to see him again.
7 months ago
My mother tried to console me as she packed my toys into boxes, but I knew I would never forget him. She would croon phrases like, ??We can always come back to visit??. I always wanted to believe this but I knew it was a lie.
I always look back on that day and regret not taking advantage of the little time I had left. I have never seen him or heard from him in the past seven years. It is painful to think back on being friends with him because I know I will not be seeing him anytime soon. I never will regret being his friend because all I do is remember that it is better to have loved and lost than to have never have loved at all.
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Your grammar and punctuality are quite excellent! The detail and vividity of the story are certainly strong! Keep up the great work!