Question:
What do you think of my song or poem?
You might enjoy this one or you might not
We will go over the waterfalls swimming like we??ve never swam before
Over the mountains we??ll find our dreams make them come true and live on free
Nothing will stop us no not a thing so keep on singing like an angle without any wings
And I bet you that the stars will come out shooting off like a bullet and disappear right through the night
So come, come with me I??ll show you the way will go our distance to find the trail that will make us fly will glide right along into the sky
And yet you see it will just be you and me
So come along will go over the waterfalls swimming in the crystal clear water
And over the mountains will find our dreams make them come true and live on free
And yet no one is stopping us and it just you and me so come along with me
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
umm, i think you need to omit the words waterfalls/mountains/trails
The waterfalls/mountains/trails make it cheesy...but other than that it's pretty good.
Try going for words that are less physical and more emotional or something
(for example line 3 is: Over the mountains we??ll find our dreams make them come true and live on free
maybe more like: Someday we??ll find our dreams make them come true and live on free)