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What do you think about this poem?

I'm 13 and I have been writing poems for the last 5 days.What do you think of this one?
Tears come dripping down from my bleeding eyes
My pain keeps making its way but I hold it back
Hair is ripped from my pounding skull
Dreams of sadness makes me numb
But I will not give up
No not today
I??ve made it too far its to early to walk away
My legs are slow but my mind is fast
I dare anything to step in my way
If it??s a fight they want then I shall give pain
I??ve crept pass the king and I have slipped through the beast
Who I fear most is nobody except me

7 months ago
Hey this is poem is not about me I just like writing sad poems you should read this one more then once

not bad....but you should change the usage of the words and try to find more deeper words...instead of being so literal ..i think the feelings in your poem is but a sad thing right?