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What do you think of my poem or song?

I wrote about my friend she just went through some sad and angry time.
You lied to me
You went and told all of your friends
Did you think?
I would never ever would find out
Well I did and now you crossed the line
I don??t know where to start but I??m losing my mind
Day to day and all the time
You said we were cool
But you went and started to be a fool
You cheated and tricked
Well now I??ve found the missing link
Here we are
All alone together now
I wanna say something before you blurt out
How could you
You went and made the biggest mistake of your life
You??ll regret when you are sleeping at night
Tossing and turning trying feel alright
But you want no you never will
It will haunt you in your dreams and will jump out at you when your walkin at night
You know we had a lot in common
We could of went on in a better direction
But now you changed the idea
How do you like it
To feel miserable all your life
You should of just stopped and think for a minute
But that was the past and the future is now
Nothing can save you
All you can do is remember what you have done


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Sounds like a rant. It's scattered and lacking rhythm. There are many improper uses of words, your grammar and tenses are incorrect and some of the sentences are incomplete.

should have...not should of
could have...not could of