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Thoughts on another poem of mine?

I dont know anything about rhyme scheme or any thing like that so i jsut wrote it like this. Just for fun.... didnt put much time into it



In need to become true one has to see the light.
One life as if no other, the mind meanders and becomes dreary and weak
The void filled with thoughts and apparitions of a false reality
The dreary days and explosive nights.
What irony do we all live in.
It weighs on as if the universe was sat on my shoulders.
The burden of a million men maybe more yet I am still a novice in my trade.
I can??t yet take it.
It pounds away as though to take my soul yet leaves a piece of self to do without.
Now Incomplete. Just enough puzzle pieces to get through this thing we call life.


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Beautiful!!!

Sounds like you put my inner thoughts in words .......... don't ever stop writing