Question:
What should I do about my poem?
Its about a soldier going into war
the last stanza I need it to say that he died
From war and the trenches
To white picket fences
His house he resides in
The uniform he??s tied in
His wife
His children
His life
.....?
^ it needs to go there.. and to ryhme with children. Does anyone have any ideas?
Additional Details7 months ago
There is more to poem... that was just the last part of it.
I was thinking of putting "An end" for the last stanza
7 months ago
Heres the poem in its entirety:
On this day a letter came
For the husband of a wife who won??t be the same
It states: You have been drafted
Forced into a world death is crafted
His wife she won??t stop crying
His children they??ve stopped trying
To understand where daddy went
Into a war he has been sent
He knows that he may not be return
From the place he does not yearn
He craves his home where he belongs
But won??t be back for very long
On the field he will fight
For the chance to see his family some night
For the glory of coming home
He will make it, that he knows
The agony of battle, it gets old
And war it seems has taken its toll
Though his strength remains in parts
Until he feels a pain in his heart
His mind scatters to a flashback
He knows now he will not be back
From war and the trenches
To white picket fences
The house he resides in
The uniform he??s tied in
His children
His wife
His life
His time
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
What you should do is drop children, and put in this:
His time.
In my opinion, that is how it should end. It is the saying that he dies in a soft, yet powerful way.
think about it. It's like this:
From the war and the trenches
To the white picket fences
His house he's tied in,
His wife,
His life,
His time.