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Position:Home>General - Arts & Humanities > This is another poem, is it trashy or is it alright?Question: This is another poem, is it trashy or is it alright?Surrender Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i really like some of the language you use and some of it i don't like it all. for instance i wouldn't describe the lake as 'placid'. it's overused since they made an alligator movie with betty white. really just find the stuff in here that's overused and cut it or revise it. there's not much which is very rare these days. also, try to work in an ophelia reference. she drowned in much the same peaceful way as the narrator of this poem (assuming you are drowning literally) |