Question:
What do you think of my poem?
Human's Disturbance
Sitting by the water's edge,
Watching the world go by,
While wild, rugged waves
Pound against the shore.
As the sun sets the makr of night,
I watch the aurora shimmer above.
Wolves howl mercilessly,
Their cries resounding from afar,
As a cool, swift breeze
Carries on from the ocean.
But even the most wonderful things
Are never meant to last.
Ships disrupt nature's peace
As a deep foghorn blows,
Waking those asleep.
Nature does know best,
Yet still we interfere.
We try too hard to change
What needn't be altered .
Go enjoy it now
For soon, it may be too late,
And have changed forevermore.
Please be honest. Thank you. Please don't just say "it's good", "i like it", or "it's bad", or "i don't like it", please give actual, helpful criticism, just be honest. Thanks :)
Additional Details6 months ago
the first poem was a joke, it was a load of horrible horrible writing, i was kidding and i'm sorry i posted it
6 months ago
Thank you for your opinions thus so far.
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
the poem has good rythm good flow there is an artistic quality about it there is something behind it....is it happiness? sadness? "wolves howl mercilessly" that sounds like there is a tinge of bitterness.......its good to incorpirate what you're feeling into your writing. im not doing so hot at it right now.....will u check out my latest question and give ME some feedback?