Question:
Could you rate my poems out of 10 please?
For You...
Oh my gorgous you look so tired, just close your eyes and go to sleep,
I am here to take your worries,
I will cry the tears youd weep.
By morning you will feel ok and dont you worry I'll be ok,
Cause any time you need me to,
Darling I shall weep for you.
Like Snow...
Your rosey smily in the night shone at me like a thousand stars,
It lit the room,
It lit my life,
Made something change and it felt right.
For once I didnt hold back
And you fell like snow into my heart,
Promised that we'd never part.
And that snow still lies there today,
A love that'll never melt away.
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Not bad, not bad at all. I don't know that I'm qualified to "rate" them. Just take for instance the fact that I rather seriously dislike Emily Dickenson. I'm a published poet myself but that doesn't give me any special qualifications to judge your work, but since you asked... I don't love the line that starts "by morning..." and I'm not crazy about the word "smily". Was that a misprint?
Here's a piece of unsolicited advice. Don' ever let anyones opinion of your poetry cause you to stop writing. Some will like it, some will not. The real question is "Do you like it?" "Does it help you deal with the crazy world around you"?
I think I would really like your poems as songs.